Susan’s deep-rooted body image issues meant that social nudity – and with it, group sex – was out of the question. When Nick asked her to accompany him to a swingers’ party she agreed, though she was terrified.
The place was full of gorgeous naked people, all fucking and sucking enthusiastically. The sexually-charged atmosphere turned her on, but one thing was certain: She was not going to get naked in front of a room full of strangers. There wasn’t enough alcohol in the world.
With Susan’s blessing, though, Nick hooked up with a nineteen-year-old hottie with natural boobs and a round, juicy ass. Susan sat beside them on the couch and watched.
I must really love my husband, she thought.
That’s when the most gorgeous, cut guy approached the couch and extended a strong hand Susan’s way.
“Excuse me,” he said. “I was wondering if you’d like to accompany me to one of the private rooms.”
Susan didn’t speak. Instead she raised her hand to his, and he pulled her to her feet.
-Jack
This is my first attempt at Flash Fiction Friday. Thanks to Tame for suggesting – or did she insist? – that we take part this week. I found this meme a challenge thanks to the 208-word maximum. While I was eventually able to craft a pretty lean and to-the-point Flash Fiction Friday story, telling a complete, coherent tale with such a limitation was a daunting task. I attempted to tell three different stories based on the picture prompt. The first one is the story of the self-conscious wife at a swingers’ party which you just read; however, my first attempt resulted in an opening paragraph that was more than one hundred words. The second story concerned an overprotective forty-something mother who rigorously auditions her daughter’s dates before letting them have sex under her watchful eye. Like the first story, I was unable to properly convey this at a reasonable length. The third idea I had concerned a woman who has experienced so many emotional highs and lows during her life that she doesn’t raise an eyebrow when a man and woman begin having sex beside her. At this point I lost all hope of bringing my Flash Fiction Friday story in under the 208-word limit, and this idea evolved into a thrilling, 971-word-long assassins-for-hire story that climaxed both figuratively and literally at a sex party in Amsterdam’s Rosse Buurt. As this story was way too long, and not quite as sexy as I had hoped, I quickly gave the first idea another shot, and the result is the story that I posted.
I might have found Flash Fiction Friday less stressful had I realized that each week’s prompt is posted on Monday or Tuesday. Knowing this would have given me several days to plan and write my story rather than the approximately six hours I gave myself.
If you want to take part in Flash Fiction Friday, check out Erotic Flash Fiction for instructions.
Great piece of writing xx been there seen the person scared to strip off, in fact it was me 2 yr ago!
And now look how far you’ve come!
This is really great – loved that she was going to get some fun too. Glad you joined in!
Nice take! I went the same direction with this, and I like your ending a lot. 🙂
Happy FFF!
Jack, you did a great job. You did very well at telling us “why” the clothed wife had that look on her face 😀
I like you idea for the second story: Mom auditions daughter’s potential boyfriends. Sounds smokin’ hot to me! I think you should flesh this one out and make it a blog post.
Happy Flash Fiction Friday.
-H
Note: the word verification is “wizin” LOL LOL
I love this interpretation.
I seem to need to start thinking on Monday to come up with something, so doing it all in six hours is impressive.
I was wondering about her half looking up and I’m glad someone rolled with it – I like that you took her attention away from the couple beside her 🙂
What a delicious photo!!!!
~shoes~
It’s great to have you join in the fun! And yes, check out the pic on Monday so it has time to ettle in…. I really liked your take, very concise.
Awesome job with your first story. I like all your ideas for your story. This one was perfect, though. I liked the everyone was able to be satisfied in the end. Happy FFF!
Wonderful story. I enjoyed the happy twist at the end..
Thanks to all who read my story! I’ll post another one next week. It was a lot of fun, and I imagine it’ll get easier as I learn to pace myself.
Tame – I couldn’t leave the self-conscious wife out. If hubby gets lucky, she’s gotta get lucky too. It’s only fair.
Max – I could say the same about your story! Great minds think alike, I guess.
Hedone – Great idea! I think I’ll do that. Hopefully it will be as smokin’ hot as you’re predicting, and no one will think I’m weird for writing it. Of course, I’m pretty sure YOU already think I’m weird. 🙂
Faile – I could probably keep doing it with just a few hours’ notice; I work well under pressure. But I’m guessing the story could have been a lot more interesting had I had a few days.
Topaz – I got the sense that something just off-camera had gotten her attention, and I was intrigued as to what that might have been. Thanks for noticing.
Red Shoes – I wish I was the photographer. Actually, forget that. I wish I was the guy.
Advizor54 – Thanks for the welcome! Your three stories are terrific, and with a couple days prep-time, I might be able to write something as brilliant.
TemptingSweets99 – Glad you enjoyed the finished product. As I said, I couldn’t bear to leave Susan unsatisfied. Of course, I like to think that had she not gotten any, she might have let Nick take care of her discretely on the subway ride home.
1manview – Thanks for the feedback! It is appreciated.
-Jack
Well done and I really enjoyed your take on the FFF!
I think you did a very good job. Keep on writing.