Behind the Scenes
For the third straight week, Ram the Sunlover is filling in for Panserbjørne. His requirements for this story were a bit different from the typical Flash Fiction Friday challenge in that in addition to the usual word range (181-199) and a required phrase (“soft rustle”), participants were given two images, seen above, and instructions to use the two images to bracket the story, with either one represented in the beginning, and the other represented at the end.
The idea for this story, and the incorporation of the two pictures, came to me pretty quick; I decided to simply present the scene, and provide almost no exposition as to who the characters were. I liked the ambiguity, and the questions it would likely raise not only in the viewers mind, but had also raised in my own. Who are these women? What is their relationship to each other? How does Bill fit in? Why are they all sharing a room? Feel free to speculate, with the understanding that I have no concrete idea as to any of it.
Deleted Scenes
While I found the 199-word limit a bit more constrictive than I initially thought it would be, I managed to tell the story I wanted to tell. Though tight and lacking in detail, no scenes were left on the cutting-room floor; the only changes I made involved deleting a few arguably unnecessary words, as usual.
Soundtrack
A piece of reggae music would work well here, preferably something slow and sensual. “Boom Shack-a-Lak” by Junior Reid comes to mind, as does “Wolf in Sheep’s Clothing” by Big Youth.
Great story, I liked the icy swim at the end. That would be the only thing that would cool me off as well. Interesting with the two pictures as bookends.
I enjoyed the story but you should finish mine ;). Very nice very nice
Sexy and ambiguous which I love because my mind can fill in the details and be as naughty as it likes. 😉
“…the flogger…” – nice!
I agree re with flash we need to trigger the imagination because of the word limits.
LOL! Aww! I’m feeling for poor Bill but I gotta LOL! at his situation. Great FFF! Enjoyed reading it. Loved the flogger line. Heh heh heh!
Great story! I think it’s all the better with its use of ambiguity. It was nice to get right into the meat of the story. So cruel for Bill, though. Hope the swim was nice. lol.
@Jack: Nice story. I wanted it to continue.
As usual you leave me wanting more of the story. I can’t wait to hear what you’ve written for me from last week.
Delightful bitches. Poor bastard had to take a cold swim… Very nicely done.