To those not in the know, it appeared that several of the passengers had forgotten the main convention of being out in public.
At least a dozen individuals – all of them female, Julius noted with some interest – were naked. Actually, that wasn’t entirely correct. Most of them wore shoes and accessories: The bespectacled thirtysomething with the conservatively-cut hair lost in her copy of Business Week wore a smart pair of heels suitable for an upwardly mobile professional, and an expensive wristwatch. The athletic woman with the familiar white earbuds in place wore New Balance running shoes, her hair tied back with a pink scrunchie. The nineteen-year-old whose backpack sat on the seat beside her as she read a geometry textbook wore fashionable boots and a “Livestrong” wristband.
The bus came to a stop and the athletic woman headed for the front exit while two women dressed only in high heels left through the rear exit. A woman boarded the bus wearing a hard hat and heavy black work boots. She carried a metal lunch box and took one of the recently-vacated seats. As she passed him, Julius found it all but impossible not to stare. Even if he could look away, there were nearly-naked women all over the bus. He was going to wind up staring at somebody.
When the bus reached his stop, Julius headed for the front exit. He paused long enough to ask the driver about the indecent exposure to which he’d been witness.
The driver simply pointed at the sign: “Clothing Optional Bus”. (257/257)
Behind the Scenes
This is our first time participating in Flash Fiction Friday since July 13. Since then, only one prompt was posted, on July 27th; as Ram the Sunlover’s site was down for part of that week we didn’t find the prompt until Friday afternoon. I considered writing something quickly but decided against it.
This week, the requirements were a 257-word limit – which I reached without exceeding on the first try – and the word “…convention…” Upon looking at the prompt photo I considered making the story a straightforward look at a bus ride in a world where people don’t always wear clothing. However, after feeling this idea to be a bit bereft of depth, I took a different approach and told the same kind of story from the point of view of an outsider, if you will, i.e. a character who is unfamiliar with the concept of clothing optional buses.
I initially considered using the required word to refer to a formal gathering of people who share a common interest, i.e. a political convention, a science fiction convention, or in this case, a nudism convention. The humor would have been found in the concept of groups of nudists actually traveling to said convention on public transportation while naked. Ultimately I found that I preferred the less obvious definition of “convention”, i.e. a standard of conduct. As I write this, I am curious to read my fellow Flash Fiction writers’ stories to see which meaning of “convention” they utilized.
This isn’t my most ground-breaking Flash Fiction Friday story, admittedly, but I had fun writing it. The word limit wasn’t high enough to go into voyeuristic detail with regard to the naked ladies riding the bus, or for that matter Julius’ inner monologue. But I enjoyed dreaming up a world wherein public transportation doesn’t require clothing. In such a world, I suppose I might ride the bus more often.
Deleted Scenes
None. Despite the fact that I found 257 words a bit constrictive this week, I managed to tell the story I set out to tell without needing to trim anything.
Soundtrack
A few bus-related possibilities come to mind, among them “Magic Bus” by The Who, and “In a De Bus” by dancehall artist Professor Nuts.
Ha I love the photo and your take on it. Poor guy never stood a chance did he. Bless his heart can’t say as I blame him because I am a girl and I would be ogling and daydreaming..
I think more clothing optional buses are needed.
Ha I love the photo and your take on it. Poor guy never stood a chance did he. Bless his heart can’t say as I blame him because I am a girl and I would be ogling and daydreaming..
LOL! This was a fun read! 257 words on the dot? Awesome!
Clothing optional bus. Ha! I love it. 🙂
Nice use of convention,too.
Glad to have you back on the FFF bus, Jack!
Fun story and concept.
Ram
Snort! I love the “clothing optional” bit.
On occasion, I attend a festival that has a clothing optional section. It’s posted with signs saying “Entering BARE country”
Now that is the way to increase ridership on public transit 🙂
-Hedone