Behind the Scenes
Unlike recent Flash Fiction Friday challenges, in particular last week’s, I found this one surprisingly easy. As soon as I saw the prompt photo I knew exactly how I was going to handle it. I didn’t begin writing until relatively late Thursday night, and managed to complete the story in a matter of minutes.
The only aspect of the story on which I wasn’t certain right at the beginning was the ending, for which I intended to include some manner of twist. I wasn’t sure whether the person complaining about the copulating couple would be Jim, the character through whose eyes we view the events; or someone else. I ultimately decided that it would be more fun to have Jim enjoying the show rather than to have him react with distaste at the exhibitionism across the aisle, and I assigned the objection to an elderly passenger in another row. In doing so, I attempted to research whether call buttons were in use on commercial airliners in the 1970s, when the prompt photo appears to have been taken. (Hence my use of “stewardess” rather than “flight attendant”, although “stewardess” is a whole word shorter.) Gleaning no definitive answer from a twenty-second Google search, I decided to sidestep the entire issue.
As was the case last week, the twist here is that the characters inhabit a world wherein behavior currently considered indecent or lewd is acceptable in public, or at least on public transportation. As was the case last week, one character is unaware of the change in society’s mores. I’m not certain whether this recurring theme is related to my own desire for society to loosen up, but it might be.
In addition to the prompt photo, the other requirements imposed by Ram the Sunlover were the inclusion of the word “bold”, and a word count of between 195 and 199. Regarding the former, I considered using it to refer to the actions of the couple; it is a bold display in which they’re engaging. But I prefer my use of the word to describe a printed disclaimer that allows for public sex on this flight.
Regarding the latter, I can’t imagine that I’m the only one who finds a required word range much more challenging than a maximum word limit. I’m not in any way saying that it made this installment of Flash Fiction Friday unpleasant or even necessarily difficult. But as I was writing I found myself at one point ready to wrap up the story only to realize that I was fifty words or so short of the minimum.
Incidentally, an account of our own experience with mid-flight hanky-panky can be found here.
Deleted Scenes
None.
Soundtrack
Jet Airliner by Steve Miller Band, from 1977.
Well that is one way to become a member of the mile high club. Wow..
Now you can’t just go changing societal mores. *smiles*
Great story!
Ooh… a plane ticket! How retro! I adore how you described what they were doing…yum. Great take!
Very nicely done. Interesting too, that you saw the person across the aisle as male, while I thought female.
I like that you made the voyeur a man. I think it was ambiguous. I’m impressed with your research. 🙂 If they ever allowed such special flights, I believe the airlines would make even more money than they’re making now. Awesome take. I’m very interested in reading your airplane hanky panky. 😀